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words vs. real by ~Pluia:iconPluia:

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words

i am beautiful, brilliant baby
lightning prairie summer girl
eloquent gorgeous and real.
i'm your lemonade, sticky and
sour-sweet, i'm worn flip-flops
i'm love.  i am flannel in autumn
i'm winter rain thunderstorms
kiss her kiss her romance darling
i'm the one spinning with cement
papercuts on the backs of her
hands - i am city lights and stars.
i'm chicago and the scientific
explanation of heartbreak because
a million pieces is better than a whole
it hurts you to look at me, not the other way around.



                                                                           real
                                                                            i am not confident.
                                                                            i am not pretty.
                                                                            i am not moon or spring or
                                                                            clasped hands.  i am not much.
                                                                            and so it's clear, in plain
                                                                            and broken prose -
                                                                            i am not worth a metaphor.
©2006-2009 ~Pluia
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Author's Comments

if you get it, fine. if not, just treat it as another poem. god knows i've written enough of them.

edit: i regret submitting this now. it should have stayed in my notebook. but it's done, so whatever.

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~alyryianis Apr 26, 2006, 4:26:36 PM
gorgeous. i feel like this so often, and i love that you were able to put it so perfectly (i've tried many times and failed). +fav

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Stop bitching, start a revolution.
:icondreamerofshadows:
~DreamerOfShadows Apr 26, 2006, 4:36:40 PM
the conflict is beautiful. have a fave.

--
Some people think the earth is flat. That doesn't mean the world is flat - it just means those people are idiots.

"TV and the Internet are good because they keep the stupid people from spending too much time in public."
:iconsilverrainbows:
!silverrainbows Apr 26, 2006, 5:10:44 PM
wow, i love this. i can relate to it so much..wonderful. :)
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~Pluia Apr 26, 2006, 5:26:46 PM
thank you.

it's pretty much been the latter for the past bit.

--
and the reason that i laugh and breathe is oh love, and the reason i do not fall into this street is love.
-e.e. cummings
:iconcallmebaby:
~callmebaby Apr 26, 2006, 6:22:59 PM
i understand.
and i love it.

--
maybe someday i'll stop doubting myself.
:iconbeastofsin:
~beastofsin Apr 27, 2006, 6:32:39 AM
aww...

you're amazing :)

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~~
If I could I would shrink myself and sink through your skin to your blood cells and remove whatever makes you hurt but I am too weak to be your cure
~~
:iconixregardo:
~Ixregardo Apr 27, 2006, 4:53:21 PM
Wow.
As DreamerOfShadows said, the conflict is beautiful. I don't really know what else to say. But I'm glad you chose to post it.

--
Microsoft: You've got questions, we've got dancing paper clips.
:icontheblueshadow:
~TheBlueShadow Apr 27, 2006, 6:52:09 PM
You should come to the One Acts Sarah...part of one of them works with words and their literal translations/interpretations
This is a good piece because readers will be able to relate to it, such as me...for instance

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"Why is there something rather than nothing, since nothing is easier than something?" -Leibniz-

"[Emo poetry] is just a string of words that think they're dark"
-t3hpython-
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